Bryce third story

Bryce's 2nd Story analysis and some thoughts I want to get down

This is Bryce's second story. Here you can see he is not drawing, he is manipulating the available shapes in the computer program to create different monsters. I would consider this a Describing Story. That is, he created some characters on the screen, and then used the audio portion of his story to describe them. He described what their bodies looked like, labeling the last one an Alien Dog. Of course this is more sophisticated than what we'll see Trace do later... just describing the stamps he's lined up on the page. But still, I think there's a connection to the stories. This is more like Deseree's first story where she talks about what she drew. Bur because of the title here, I'd again rank it a little more story than Trace's work.

Notice the background. Background is Bryce's Anchor. I notice that pretty much all of them... with no prompting from me included some sort of setting. I'd say only Michael and his money were the only characters without time spent on background.

Bryce means for you not to just look at the shapes even though he's describing their parts. He wants you to see aliens here.

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Character Driven Stories...
character, set in a background, show action, movement over time. These I consider traditional stories.

Descriptive Stories
computer artwork featured... a show and tell with a narrative feel.
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I think the fatalism in some of these stories (not shown by bryce, the sci fi guy) is cultural. Can I write Smitherman on this? Hah hah.


I'm trying to make connections to Labbo's work on different stances toward the computer which I think are there. Like for some the computer is a place to draw a story, but the story is not inherently digital. So in these cases the storyteller is in control.

Then some stories are purely digital... like Trace just describing what he's put together. And I think a little bit of Jaidyn's last story, though with her her audio adds too much personality to actually be purely digital.

And some stories are hybrid... like I think this one is. sure it's about what was created digitally... but it's also about Bryce's aliens. It is absolutely clear in his third movie.

Bryce 2nd Story

Bryce Story Analysis

I think Bryce had been waiting his whole life to tell this story. According to talks with his teacher, he is a very quiet boy that hardly says anything in class either prompted or otherwise. So you can just imagine that the reason he is so quiet is that all these sci fi stories are floating around in his head.

I consider this a traditional story character, plot movement, appropriate ending. This one is different from the others because it is easily fit into a genre of writing.

An interesting thing about Bryce's work here is that .. .well one thing is that he does have an anchor... like Trace it is the "background." But this story was born and floated in his mind well before he got to the technology. Instead of drawing (and this is something he did through out his work) he manipulated the different shapes he could make with the software (and also the pattern fill on the paint can for the backgrounds.
But he definitely... in this story shaped the digital world on his screen to fit what he wanted the story to be. He made a rhombus looking shape to be the thunder horn or sword or whatever it is.

My role? I helped him record and i saved and placed the pictures he drew in photostory.

Visually this story was not interesting because he talked for so long the story didn't "move."

Would this story have come out of his mind if not for this opportunity? I don't think so. His teacher didn't necessarily have him writing a whole lot of choice writing. She did come to me after the project started with a paper he'd written about an alien that was quite clever and she was amazed at the peek she got into the mind of this quiet boy. Heh.

Bryce First Story

Michael 3rd story analysis

The money continues! This was a very independent effort. Unlike the 2nd story, Michael did not ask for help to do anything with this. What is interesting to me is the very distinct style of each student artist. I love the people Michael draws. I wonder if he draws them like this in his regular writing. Perhaps I need to scan his writing and see.

I consider this a traditional story... characters, plot movement.

Characters: has moved on from family. Here's a "man" who faces a violent end. These kids find violence interesting/funny/entertaining. Okay you say that's a typical little boy thing and that's true. But the girls did it too. (Arianna and Deseree)

This one, like most of the third stories, were recorded independently. That is, on the first ones I recorded for them, but on this one they did it on their own. Might explain the lilt toward violent deaths and blood!

Michael's Third Story

Michael's 2nd Story Analysis

Michael's Second Story is posted below. His anchor is the dollar bills. In this case he needed to change the size of the bill to fit what he wanted to say. I helped him do that. I remember when he had a copy/paste issue he wailed quite loudly. It was something I could fix, but I remember he was quite upset. Basically he meant to copy/paste his small size bill, but had accidentally pasted the whole picture which kinda messed things up for him.

Michael has a bill cosby voice!

Michael was freed in this story. He was having a good time. Of course he knew that they would share with the others by this time.

I consider this a traditional story. I mean there were characters and action. There was of course violence (actually a common trait across many of the stories) and there's the gorilla digression. But he seems to get back to an "end" before he finishes.

It is also an elaboration of his first story. Now his money is in a basket.

Characters: Family Mom/Dad/Sister
Movement: giving of dollars and punch to face and giving of gorilla, something about dad not winning?
Anchor: money

Michael's First Analysis

This is a traditional math story problem. He didn't really get title page/other pages first.

I remember that Chosen started making the page of money first. And Michael wanted it to. They both had a page full of money. Michael shortened his for the title. I just asked him what the title was and he told me the 12 dollars thing, even though there are other bills in there. It would seem that he knows this too.

Was he making a pattern?

I have this, my mom has this. She has the same as me. There is movement in this "story." Sort of beginning middle end.

He speaks in the same stilted, careful form that Deseree did at first. That voice is only used by these students the first time.

Mchael's First story

Description of picture drawn. I don't think this rises to the idea of the second one... that it is a story that she is talking about. I think this is a description of the picture she drew.

She says that this is her favorite one of all the stories she made because it's the most colorful one.


I think the key is... how did she leap from her first story to the second to the third...

And it seems that Bryce started there where picture/story/voice work as one. I guess Michael did too. So how did they get there?

The first story from deseree

Desere's 2nd Story Commentary

ah! this is a describing story too! I just realized this. She is not telling the story, she's telling ABOUT the story. i think i get it. She has not processed that the story and the voice part go to gether... not till her last story! She wrote a story... and now she's describing her story vocally. She sees the digital process as two separate events.

I wonder what made her make the leap in that last story.

I might have messed her up with the words. She wanted them on each page, but I should have copied and pasted them separately... 1 star, 2 star, etc. Instead of all in one bunch.

Here too was seeking more from the the technology... a manipulation... she asked me to do the cutting and pasting. She was not limited by what she knew how to do. She merely asked for it to be done.

This is an attempt at a number/counting story that she has probably run into in her reading life. I think this was the only story that fit into a traditional genre. (except for Bryce and his scifi kinda stuff.}

Genres I think I have seen in these stories:
fatal realism - lots of life sux stories like Des' duck story below.
The description of the story
The description of how the technology was manipulated.
More traditional stories.


There is not a description of the picture. It's a description of the story she wrote.

I think stars/clouds are her anchor. The place she starts to get her juices going.

Deseree's Second Story

Desere's 3rd Story Analysis

1. Use of text in the pictures.
2. Problems without solutions... sux to be you stories. You're walking along, minding your own business and then wham!
3. Particularly so with the driver running off laughing.
4. Duck characters (animals) But with a mother/baby structure.
4. Voice ... story acted out in the voice.
5. Characters, setting... street in the picture.

I would consider this story a more traditional linear tale. I still think the stories where crap happens is part of our african american church tradition. I mean I think we as a people are always aware of the chance of fate/God/Powers that be changing our happy little lives in an instance.

The cruelty of the driver is fascinating to me?

My role in this story? I don't think i had any. I was not even there when she recorded it, as I had helped in the past.

Deseree's Last story